3 Characters, 1-4 environments.
We open on a space explorer in his dark, eerily lit ship with his small robot companion. A hologram suddenly bursts from his controls, indicating the location of an abandoned space station nearby with a treasure inside. The explorer cautiously lands on the station, and begins to search for the item. Although he passes through lots of beautiful environments as he crawls through the ducts and passageways, something is definitely wrong - the station is abandoned. He enters the final chamber and finds the treasure - a glowing blue rock - only to find that a dark alien monster has actually laid the whole situation as a trap. The monster and the explorer have a short, deep conversation - ending with "I'll be right behind you. You can't escape." Or something to that effect. The explorer runs, and the monster is destroying the entire station behind him, sliding through the ducts, right on his tail - the explorer barely manages to board his ship and take off, with the monster looking on from a distance. The monster then retreats back into the station to hunt the explorer another day. The explorer admires the glowing rock - a rare treasure- then places it inside a bag filled with hundreds of similar stones, and his ship blasts off into the distance.
Question:
ReplyDeleteThe glowing blue rock--it's a rare treasure, but he already has hundreds of them? It just isn't clear why he put so much effort to get that particular one rock--is it more special than the rest? Why does he want that rock? What does it do? Why does he need/really want it? (i.e. is it a fuel for the spaceship?)
What is the role of the robot companion?
And again, character development will really help :D